once there was 2 10 year old girl that was at school. chelsea left her chromebook at home so Chelsea andEmalea went to Chelsea's house. then it went dark all of a sudden. then they got Chelsea's chromebook and went to school but when they got to the park there was a man waiting for Chelsea and Emalea.. it got really weird so fast they didn't want them so he left but then... The girl started to dig they found 4 bones that was covered in blood and dirt but that did not stop them from digging. But Chelsea's mum come... the 1 man had dark black hair and was wearing all black. he was my dad's friend Tim . Tim come back but it was to late Emalea and Chelsea was gone. the only thing that was left was... ut then the girls watch up. The girls said that they were scared and Chelsea's mum said it will be ok. the only thing that was left was a piece of paper that said " Maybe next time"This was really fun to write about hoop you like it.
Hi Chelsea I really like what you have written but maybe next time double check on your spelling because you have a few mistakes.
ReplyDeleteHey Chelsea Im Maddie from Blaketown School, I really like you story but you have a few mistakes in your writing and one mistake you can change, you write nitemare but it should be Nightmare.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your time and thank you for reading my comment
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